Time to go to the gym;
To be in form is so good do it a diet with vitamins and proteins . We must to eat meat,fish, fruit and the most very important , vegetals. All this for be in form we need to do exercise , we should go to run or go with the bicycle and we must to practice some sport who the football or the basketball or anyone sport. Although more people think that do it sport only serves for a have a good form , the sport serves for have a good health and this is the most important .
More people take shakes with vitamins and proteins and they believe that with this is enough , other people believe that the best form for lose weight is do it a diet that in these diet the only food that we must eat in all day is one appel and things like.
However is becoming more the people that with sacrifice and willpower , practise some exercise and have health and are in form.
In my opinión , I think that you want , you can and this is the willpower that you need, do it exercise is the best form for be happy with your body and have a good health so is time to go to the gym.
Marco Saz Garcia
Hi, I'm Rafa Bernabé
ResponderEliminarTo start I would like to say that I think "Appel" is not well said, but will have been a mistake to write,
The composition is very good, although in the structure don't distinguish the parts.
Also I seems to me that "opinion" hasn't accent.
Byee ¡¡
Is it an opinion essay or a discussion essay? It doesn't seems to me clear from the way that is written. Maybe you should have separate paragraphs so that the structure is clearer and you could have used vocabulary like: "It is widely known..." or "It is a fact that...".
ResponderEliminarRegarding the topic of the composition, I totally agree with your opinion.
Personnally, I think as you . People usually stick to some bad diets because they think they're going to lose weight faster but.. It is very unhealthy and the only right way to lose weight and get fit is doing some exercise everyday. Scientists claim that it is better to do some exerxise everyday than a lot irregulary... I ride my bike with Paqui each Friday , do somebody want to join us ? Kisses !!!! ;)
ResponderEliminarHi , Is a good composition I like so much this topic , because I love the sports and do exercise. This Composition have some conectors but he could put more . I agree with Lorena wiht that Marco should have separate paragraphs and the structure is good . I find a mistake( in my opinión ) any words in English have accent. jajajajaj !
ResponderEliminarEmilio Torres Perez
okey Maria I should go with you in bike jajaja! , this mistake (opinión) is induced for the program microsoft office word , this program correct all mistakes and he should consider that word a mistake
ResponderEliminarMarco
I agree with you Marco, it isn't enough and it's unhealthy if you don't eat or if you stick to a bad diet. The better is to go to the doctor and he make you a personal diet.In this diet you will eat a health food and you should do a bit exercise, it is the best way if you want to lose weigh and you feel good with yourself. Finally, you have to rememnber than after preposition, the verb is in -ing.
ResponderEliminarAlejandra Ávila
Firstly, I want to say that the paragraphs aren't differentiate. Also I would say that in your compostion there are mistakes as: "To be in form is so good do it a diet with vitamins and proteins "* I belive that the sentence is of this way: "To be in form is so good like to do a diet with...". I think that this sentence will be best of other way: "All this for be in form we need to do exercise"--> "We have to do exercise for to do on top form, the exercise is very important". Pther mistake is: "Although more people think that do it sport..."->"Although more people think that to do sport...". Other mistake is: "However is becoming more the people..."->"However more people are becoming...".Other mistake is: " I think that you want , you can and this is the willpower that you need,..."->"I think that if you want, you can...". Well, I think that you can to do more better, but, the composition isn't bad. Matter the topic, I agree with you because I think that the sport is very important for to do in form. As good Maria says, I go on bike all the fridays and if you want to go with we, you can to do. ^^
ResponderEliminarMUCHIIISIMAS GRACIAS ♥
by Paqui ;D
I am agree with the coment to Emilio, Marco has used conectors very well but he should have separate the paragraphs better¡
ResponderEliminarby: Adrian¡¡ ;D
I agree with you, Marco; but I think that you should have done some paragraphs. I have found some mistakes for example: "go with the bicycle" you should have put "ride"; "more" is "más" and you should have put "many" people.Finally,I want to say that you should have done longer it.
ResponderEliminarVirginia Belmonte.
Your composition is very well. You have put many connectors and this composition is well structured and also your ideas are well structured
ResponderEliminarALEJANDRO SANCHEZ GRACIA
I love your writing and I agree with you. To lose weight it's best to go to the gym because it is the healthiest way to lose weight. CAROLINA
ResponderEliminarHi Marco!
ResponderEliminarI am Paula Guirao!
I like the sports but I think that the diet is unhealthy.
About your composition, you should be more paragraphs.
Bye :D
I am javier!!
ResponderEliminarThe text is well structured and I think is consistent with willpower like anything is possible and is not only important to be strong also in good health.
the composition is fine, but I think too many connectors used very simple, and also always repeated the same connectors, but overall the composition is very good. I hope to get to class tomorrow jaaja
ResponderEliminarI agree with the idea that we are in form, but i think that the people who do diet,exceeded, because the doctors say that with go to runnig three days in the week is good.
ResponderEliminarJESUS VERA
Firstly, I have to say that you don't have to use the translator because we can see that, and there are some mistakes such as: *to be in form* the correct would be ''to be fit', an other thing is that *so good do it a diet* this sentence does't make sense, you can't say *the most very important* is easier ''the most important'', *we must to practice some sport WHO the footbal..* the word sport isn't a person to use that pronom so, there you must put 'such as,for exemple, as..' and I stop with the latest when you put more people* I think you want to say ''most'' people...etc
ResponderEliminarOn the other hand, this topic is very interesting I like to go to the gym because then I feel energetic, and the most important healthy. And of course is a good way to lose weight for people who want it. And that's all, an advice is would be better if you separate your composition in paragraphs!
:)
I have liked very much the redaction.
ResponderEliminarThe topic have interested and is important.
Marco has reason great in everything what says.
Miriam Cuartero
After reading your composition, I could say that it is quite good. It's well structured but it has some mistakes like in the second line or when you are going to talk about the sports you should become wuth like or as. I agree with you because sports its a good way the keep fit and to be healty. As you have said having a good diet is also important.
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