Mario's composition
What do you think about the government's new law ?
The last year, in Spain , the government approved a new law about abortion. Since a lot of time, this topic has generated a lot of opinions in favour or against it. I think abort should be allowed when it would be necessary (for example if the fetus is going to die or something like this)
This law consisted in that people under sixteen could abort without parental permission. Are we crazy ? Where have we arrived ?! If you are sixteen , you can't drink and you can't smoke, but you can abort... To my mind, it has no sense.
Most of the times, when a girl gets pregnant is because she and her couple haven't take the necessary precaution. So, if you are like adults to do this things, accept the consequences. I only would see the abort if the condom would have broken.
As a conclusion, I believed that this law was unnecessary and I'm against it. Now, with the arrival of the new government , this law has been abolished.
Your composition is perfect and I don't found mistakes. I agree with you, the law about abortion was a madness.
ResponderEliminarI clarify that I'm favour of abortion depends on the case but I think that girls under sixteen years should have the parental permission because their parents can help them and of this way they won't do it again but if the girl knows that she can be abort when she wants, probably she won't mature and she will do again .
Eliminargood composition but I don't agree with you Mario because if a girl is raped ,what happend? she must have the baby?
ResponderEliminarMarco Saz Garcia
I´m in favour of Mario. I believe that the law of the abortion was a mistake. If a girl remains pregnant for an irresponsibility, so much she as the boy, they must assume the problems. Exist other possibilities, for example, giving in adoption, before killing a son. I´m glad that the law already is abolished. I have liked very much the composition.
ResponderEliminarYour writing is clear but has the right structure and you've joined all in one paragraph. It is a topical issue and you have defended your arguments a clear and valid. My opinion is the same as yours, What a crazy abortion law!
ResponderEliminarCarolina Sanchez Bullejos.
Hi Mario!
ResponderEliminarI also disagree with abortion, with the excepcion of cases like violations,the fetus is ill or is going to die...
However, I think that the last goverment did a mad law because it was supposed that girls under 16 needed her parental permission to tattoo or to piercing themselves but, they don't need their parental permission to abort.What a illogical thing!
I 've found some mistakes like :
-Since a lot of time --> since a lot of time ago
- it would be --> it was (subjunctive)
-consisted in --> consisted of
-Where have we arrived ?! --> Where will it all end ?!
-it has no sense --> it makes no sense
-her couple --> her partner ( couple is for 2 people)
-I only would see the abort if the condom would have broken. --> I only would be able to see the abort if the condom broke. (2 conditional)
In terms the structure and grammar is very good, on the subject, to my mind, I think the under 16 girls who get pregnant are not cost them anything to say: Papa, I'm pregnant. And to hospital to abort.
ResponderEliminarOf course this isn't so simple, but that's the easy choice.
Rafa Bernabe.
I think that your composition is very well but I believe that you should have used the 2 conditional. I haven't found any mistake more. I have to say that disagree with you. In my opinon, everybody has the rigth to live.
ResponderEliminarVirginia Belmonte.
I completely agree with you and you have done a good composition. Besides seeing the mistakes that Maria has said, I've found another: Most of the times--> most of times ( the preposition -the- is unncessary because you are talking in general.
ResponderEliminarTo my mind I only accept the abortion as my classmates have said, if the foetus is going to die, if the girl has been raped..
the work is done quite well and is well structured, as always
ResponderEliminarI agree with Mario, but a girl who had been raped must be able to abort if she think that it is necesary. Mario has been wrong when he said ¨her couple¨ instead of her partner, and ¨ I believed ¨ instead of say it in present. All in all, well done Mario!
ResponderEliminarAngel Valero