Claudia's composition
The last year in our country, the government approved a new law. This law consisted In that adolescents under sixteen years could abort without permission of their parents.
The role based here we have the parents, since the majority of adolescent girls if they are pregnant they would be afraid to tell her parents and would have been aborted alone. Parents should know how to tell their children about what is right and what does not, and that if by chance impregnate his daughter what you need to do is to support and decide that are going to do it before getting angry because a bug can have it all over the world. The Parents also should tell their daughters to use contraceptives without any fear.
On the other hand they are schools that are also important to prevent pregnancies. They once a year is dedicated to give lectures on sex to explain to the adolescents things related to sex and the importance of not using precaution as the condom. In these meetings the students ask What they want and your questions are resolved. At the end of this reunion the caregivers distributed condoms by the Institute. The main of these meetings is for students Know that sex without a condom can be dangerous Because they can be spread diseases or unwanted pregnancies.
In conclusion i think that the adolescents must have head and be responsible for one thing and it consequence.
I think that your composition is well structurated but I have found some mistake as for example: the personal pronoun " I " ALWAYS must be a capital letter. You have to try write without capital letter in half of a sentence. There is a sentence that I don't understand: " They are schools.."
ResponderEliminarI want to say that agree with you.
Virginia Belmonte.
To my mind, Your composition Is difficult because I Don't understand very well, it seems as if You had usted a traslate. I found some mistakes like: in the second paragraph, would need a Subject; i don't know if "if by" exist, You have writen her when You Should write them; when someone talk, talk about something ; "they" write with are in the present... I think that parents Should talk about sex with her teenagers sons and draughter. Alejandra Ávila lopez
ResponderEliminarI think that your composition is well struturated but I agree with my classmates when they say that they have found some mistakes.
ResponderEliminarBut good job Claudia!
Paula Guirao
Firstly, I would like to say that this law let girls OVER sixteen abort, not under 16.I think that your composition is not quite good estructured and it took me too much time to understand it. he,he,he.I've found some mistakes like:
ResponderEliminar-consisted In - consisted of
-permission of their parents- parental permission or parents' permission
-The role - the rule
I don't understand this estructure : The role based here we have the parents ?
-would have been aborted alone. : they would have aborted by their own.
-and that if by chance impregnate his daughter: and what parents have to do if their daughter gets pregnant by chance
-They once a year is dedicated to give - One day of the year is dedicated to ..
-The main of these meetings is for students Know - the most important thing of those meeting is that students know...
-the adolescents must have head - the adolescents must be mature
very good writing, you must continue so in June and will approve very well, Bye!
ResponderEliminarYour composition is good structured with the correct parts but I've seen some mistakes such as:
ResponderEliminar- The last year--> Last year (without -the-)
-..you need to do is to support and decide that are going to..--> you need to do IT to support and decide that YOU are going to..
-The second paragraph in my opinion is very confused. In addition you should try to write sentences shorter to make the lecture easier.
-They once a year is dedicated to give lectures on sex..--> Only one day of the year is dedicated to give some lectures about sex..
-The main of these meetings is for students--> They do these meetings with the aim that students..
-In conclusion i think that the adolescents must have head and be responsible for one thing and it consequence.--> In conclusion I think that the adolescents must settle down and be responsable because if the girl has done this,she has to accept its consequences.
I agree with the mistakes that my classmates have corrected, I believe that they have corrected all the mistakes of your composition. I agree with your opinion.
ResponderEliminarI believe that Claudia has reason. The parents must know it. They are the best to advise his children and them to help. Not all the girls react well to an abortion. If the girl becomes sick and the parents do not know it, it can put on this one much worse. Nowadays, it looks like many pairs, they have the tablet of the day despues and the abortion as a new contraceptive method.
ResponderEliminarI think that is composition is very well the vocabulário is eassy to understant and the parte are very gwell estructurate
ResponderEliminarWell, the mistakes has already said by my classmates. I think about this delicate topic that the people have to be responsible, that they assume the consecuencies.
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