Carols Composition
MORE POWER FOR ESTUDENTS?
Each day students have more power to the point that they can have more power than some teachers. My opinion about this is that students and teachers must have the same right to power.
The disadvantages of having the same power is that the teacher has less authority than before and therefore the student can have more voice and opposing his orders. But this would happen only with the unjust people.
The advantages are several. The first and most important is that it eliminates the unjust actions of the students and the other advantage is that the teacher to do the things you have to have the opinion of the student because if they disagree and see it can protest unfair or out by teachers.
In conclusion, do not think either has to have more power than anyone else so do not have to give more power to students. Both have to have the same power as well teachers and students will make things better and sometimes it does not.
I totally agree with Carol. Teachers don't have to need autority like an autoritary regimen, they have to make themselves been respected by the pupils with their acts. Gramatically I think it's correct.
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Hi Carol, I've found some mistakes like:
ResponderEliminar-'My opinion about this is' -> My opinion about this it's* that
-'the student ' -> it's only 'students' because you're talking in general , isn't it?
-'eliminates'-> it's better 'prevents'
-'the other advantage' -> 'another advantage'
-I think that this sentence is badly structured :'the teacher to do the things you have to have'
-' do not think either has to have more power ' :' I think that none of them have to own more power..'
I think that your composition is good, but you could use others conectors as : "on the one hand"(in the second paragraph), in the other hand (in the third paragraph) and the composition had been best. Also I have found a mistake, and this is : "do not think either..."->"I don't think..."(the subjecte). Furthermore, my opinion is that the teachers have to have more power than the students. And it dosn't implicate that there isn`t respect.
ResponderEliminarthe principal mistake ; you don't peak about advantages or disvantages in opinion composition
ResponderEliminarMarco Saz
and carol.., estudents?!! is students
ResponderEliminarMarco Saz
You should write your opinion in the conclusion because you have done a discussion essay although you should have done a opinion essay with this topic. And I think that although the opinion of the students is very important, teachers should have more power than them.
ResponderEliminarCarol your composition is correct but you have some mistakes as all of us and I've found these that Maria has said.
ResponderEliminarAbout your opinion I disagree because I think that students shouldn't have the same rights that teachers because they are who teach us and we must respect to them.
I agree with you, Carol ! I think that you should have done it longer. You have done a correct structure but you must put your opinion in conclusion. I advise you that don't use article "the".
ResponderEliminarVirginia Belmonte.
I think that Carol should to give her opinion in advantages or disvantages ..
ResponderEliminarBut is good, Maybe a bit short.
Rafa Bernabe
This one structured well I think that the teachers have to have mas be able but be mas just persons jaja
ResponderEliminarcarolina text is too short and lacks many connectors
ResponderEliminarI have liked Carol's composition. I believe that it she has reason. The teachers and pupils should have the same authority.
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