*Why do so many people gather in public places to drink together? Do you think that the ''botellón'' is a good way of socialising?*
Nowadays our generation has been bombed by television, films, music, with freedom messages, but a freedom related with have fun with differents drugs, linking alcohol for example with the possibility of flirt with some girl.
If you observed the situation you can see that young people don't have as money as to drink two cocktails on a pub, but if you can go to a supermarket and buy the same drunk in a cheaper way, you'll do, and that's what happen.
Another thing is socialising, I think that's a secondary reason, because you can socialising everywhere, because we live on a society. But it's true that young people feel better without no one seen them, and the solution is "botellon".
So in my opinion, botellon is a good solution, but it has to be controled on places where authority can help people if it's necesary.
-Your introduction is very confusing, Asensio, you have to rewrite it.
ResponderEliminar-If you observed the situation you can see (verb tense concordance)
-as money as (another word needed)
-the same drunk (wrong spelling, "drunk" means borracho, though this is the result after a couple of hours!Just kidding...none of you would ever get drunk in a botellón...)
-you'll do, (Direct Object pronoun needed)
-what happen (concordance subject-verb)
-you can socialising (VERY BIG MISTAKE!)
-without no one seen (different form of the verb. Tip: it comes after a preposition)
-controled (spelling)
-authority (if sg, it needs an article, or you can use the plural without the article, since you are speaking in general)
I agree with your opinion because in the discotheque drinks are very expensive and youngs haven't money. Your composition, for me, is very good.
ResponderEliminarThe text this well structured and the content whit argument is coherent the topic also this well rubengo
ResponderEliminarAsensio,i agree with you, with the theme that young people do not want to be seen. However the composition is short.
ResponderEliminarJESUS VERA
I believe that your composition is more less good. But it is a bit short. When you do a conditional, verbs must have concordance: first conditional ( If + present, futur ) or second conditional ( If + past simple, would). I haven't found any mistakes more.
ResponderEliminarVirginia Belmonte.
I agree with you and with my classmates. Drinks in the disco are very expensive and if you want to drink and save money, "botellón" can be a good option. In addition, you can meet new people. About your composition is short but I liked it, although in the line three you have written: "If you observed the situation you can see..." and I think that it should be: "If you observe the situation you can see...".
ResponderEliminarOh, sorry... While I wrote the comment, Virginia sent another saying the same thing.
EliminarI believe that "you can socialising" is "you can socialize".
I don´t find any more mistakes in the composition of Asensio and think like when he says that the botellon is used since in the discotheques the consumiciones are very expensive.
ResponderEliminarHello, I am Luis Baños Ruiz.
ResponderEliminarI liked the composition.
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