1. What can be done to reduce the number of car accidents?
In my opinion the government should ban cars that exceed speed limits and also they must introduce news regulations about technologies to reduce the number of car accidents.
Also, car companies must produce safer cars, with more protective bodyworks and with gadgets to prevent accidents in high traffic situations, that it could be a movement sensor. In USA, Generals Motors had introduced in 2009 a new revolutional safety method that consist in a sensor of movement which if the car's balance is not adecuate automatically corrects it.
In addition, the government can also try to concern people about the risks of a dangerous driving, with advertisements or things like this.
To concluse, the number of car accidents is quite low, but everything can be improved, so these are my ideas to improved it.
The composition is good and interesting, being a actually topic. Maybe there are not many car accidents as some time ago, but there are people who die each weekend on the road for any reason, and this we have to delete it.
ResponderEliminarRafa Bernabe ¡¡
The composition is very good structurated and I haven't found any mistkaes. Also, I would say that I totally agree with your opinion .
ResponderEliminarI think that your composition is very interesting. You have done a well structure and I haven't found any mistakes. Finally, I have to say that I agree with you.
ResponderEliminarVirginia Belmonte.
Angel your composition is very interesting because the topic is current. In addition the text is well structured and cohesive by the varied vocabulary.
ResponderEliminarJESUS VERA
Your composition is very good written and structured. I've only found a mistake: to concluse>to conclude.
ResponderEliminarI like the composicion. I believe that Angel has reason. But I believe that there are many announcements reporting on the dangers in the road.
ResponderEliminarI like so much yuor oomposotion. I totally agree with your opinion and with your ideas to improve that situation.
ResponderEliminarI don't find any mistake,so you have done a good work.
Although we are the guilty of the most of accidents due to our hight absent-mindedness.
I agree with you Angel and yes! one more! is a excellent composition
ResponderEliminarMarco Saz Garcia
Good compositon, Ángel. Here you have the few mistakes I have found. Can you all help Ángel with the correction?
ResponderEliminar-news regulations
-that it could be (different wording needed)
-Generals Motors
-revolutional (this word doesn't exist)
-that consist in (concordance and preposition)
-which if the car's balance is not adecuate automatically corrects it. (punctuation)
-concern people (different word needed)
-To concluse (spelling, Lorena has mentioned it)
-to improved
-adecuate (spelling)
EliminarI like your compostion although it's not a long one is very clear, well structured and has no gramaticall mistakes.
ResponderEliminarAsensio Argiler Grau
Asensio, I've just highlighted the mistakes in the composition...
EliminarAngel, your composition is very good. On hte other hand, I agree with you about the goverment
ResponderEliminarALEJANDRO SANCHEZ GRACIA
Can anybody please try to help with the correction? It would make me so happy...
ResponderEliminarI see yout point Steven. The government should support the advertising campaigns and introduce new technologies to make cars safer.
ResponderEliminarThay also can reduce this accidents taking care when they're driving
-news regulations--> news rules
ResponderEliminar-that it could be (different wording needed)--> that would be
-Generals Motors--> [I don't know..I think that it is a noun of some company]
-revolutional (this word doesn't exist)--> revolutionary
-that consist in (concordance and preposition)--> that is about..
-which if the car's balance is not adecuate automatically corrects it. (punctuation)-> which if the car's balance is not adecuate, automatically corrects it.
-concern people (different word needed)--> arouse people (concienciar)
-To concluse (spelling, Lorena has mentioned it)--> to conclude
-to improved--> to improve ( to + infinitive)