Adrian's composition
Students are in school just to study and they to can have a steady job in the future. In the past many students had no advantages in comparison to students who are now studying in schools,some examples of advantages are:
In the past, students did not have the methods that are present today in many schools, an example of this, a student can request examination at any time to review it if he do not agree.
At present another advantage they have now have students are study aids such as scholarships.
In conclusion although I think the students have had power many situations I also think that compared to the past at this time has many types of aids.
The composition is not quiet good, firstly you have comitted some gramatical errors as "they to can have steady job" I would say " to be able to have a steady job" I you don't complicate yourself. Another thing I don't like is that this composition is specially short, but you are the writer and you put your own limits!
ResponderEliminarAsensio
To my mind, I believe that your composition is very short and it seems like you had used the translator.Moreover , I 've found some mistakes ( the same ones as ASensio) and I think that your composition isn't very well structured because for example : 'another advantage they have now have students are study ...-> another advantage they have now is that they can get study..
ResponderEliminarAdrian, I think that your composition is very short. On the other band, this composotion is very bad structured and i don't understhand very well this composition because don't have sense
ResponderEliminarALEJANDRO SANCHEZ GRACIA
Adrian..I think that you have done this composition very fast,and for this reason your composition isn't good structured and it is very short. If you want to pass...you must work and to study more.
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I am Paula Guirao
EliminarFirst, I think that your composition isn`t good worked because there are mistakes, you haven`t used good the conectors, and the composition is very short. I think that you can look the book, and it explains everything correctly , for another time. Well, I have founded mistkaes as: "they to can" ->"they can" (but I'm not sure); "had no" -> "hadn't or had not"; And I haven't found more. I think that the composition's topic isn`t exactly, you had to write about " the power in the schools", you could support in the past, but all of this isn't good.
ResponderEliminarwhat's mean aids?
ResponderEliminarMarco Saz
A composition with 6 lines?? I don't remembered this topic but I think that this composition is too short.
ResponderEliminarI don't understand it very well but I imagine that you want to mean. So, for the next time you must improve your work.
A composition of almost 6 lines is very short. I think that this: 'some examples of advantages are' it isn't very well, you should introduce your ideas in a different way. I agree with the mistakes that my classmates have said, and I found: "he do not agree"--> "he doesn't agree/ he disagrees". Marco, I believe that 'aids' means 'ayudas' but I'm not sure.
ResponderEliminarAdrian..I think that you have done this composition very fast,and for this reason your composition isn't good structured and it is very short. If you want to pass...you must work and to study more.A composition of almost 6 lines is very short also I think that your composition isn`t good worked because there are mistakes.
ResponderEliminarI agree with the mistakes that my classmates have said, EMILIO
Firstly, you have to do it longer. You must to do a paragraph with disadvantages and in addition, I have found some mistake: In the second paragraph, you haven't put a verb "At present another advantage IS* that they...".
ResponderEliminarVirginia Belmonte.
the opinion of Adrian coincide with me. Before the students didn´t have as much progress as today. we go to school to study and learn things you do not know so we should not have any power.
ResponderEliminarThe structure of your text is not quite correct, I would have put more advantages and disadvantages.
I agree with Adri, In the past the students were below than teachers, although today they enjoy to benefits which didn't exist before.
ResponderEliminarthe composition is short and it isn't well expressed.
Rafa Bernabe
Well, your composition more or less. Youvshould read last pages of the student and you can learnd how go it better. However, i agree with you about the educationvwas before and today. Alejandra
ResponderEliminarThis a structured well though it is short
ResponderEliminaradrian yo pienso que este el la redaccion mas corta que hay de toda la clase . tiene que esforzarte mas !
ResponderEliminarAdrian I think that the shorter the wording that is the whole class. must try harder!
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