Would you travel abroad to find work? (Lorena's composition)
Due
to the economic situation of the country, each year there are more people in
Spain who travel abroad in order to find a work. Work abroad brings good things
but this topic has some disadvantages too. In the following lines we will analyze
this topic.
On
the one hand, travel abroad help us to improve the ability to speak a foreign
language and we can know a new culture with different customs and maybe meet
new and different people. In addition, if you return to your country, the
experience abroad will be good for your curriculum.
On
the other hand, people who have travelled for working say that the worst thing
has been when they have not had to their families and their friends in the more
complicated moments and they missed the country and our food too. A major
disadvantage is that before people traveled abroad to find a work because they
want try a new experience or expand their curriculum, nowadays travel abroad to
find a work is a necessity because this people have a serious economic
situation and they have not other choice.
In
conclusion, I think that although we can miss people that we love, work abroad
is a good experience that can help us to improve academically and personally.
Perhaps I could change my opinion in a future but I would like work abroad for
several years because I believe that this experience could be interesting…
lorena your composition is very good, with a perfect structure and the theme vocabulary very well analyzed.
ResponderEliminarJESUS VERA
I Think tha when things don´t work in your country well and there isn´t work , It is best to go abroad.I like this topic because i would like to go abroad to find work or spend time outside and see the world.
ResponderEliminargood composition . I don´t find mistake ! EMILIO TORRES
I totally agree with you Lorena,it seems to me that despite of leaving our familly and friends here ,we have to travel and know every country that we can.Specially, people from Bigastro and little towns need to open their minds because they are very narrow-minded and it is terrible.World doesn't begin and doestn't finish in Bigastro.It is interesting meeting new people,new cultures and above all, learning languages which I adore. I know for certain that if I couldn't be translator I would be air hostess in order to travel a lot :)
ResponderEliminarLorena, I like so much your composition above all the topic. I think that it has been the best topic until now.
ResponderEliminarYou have done a very good work. About mistakes I've only found two or three for example on the second paragraph when you say: On the one hand,travel..the correct woulb be--> on the one hand,TRAVELLING.., an other on the third paragraph when you say: they want try..the correct is--> want TO try..I'm sure you know it. And that's all.
Finally, I agree with your opinion. I know people who are working abroad right now or have worked and it has been a fantastic experience, at the beginning it can be difficult but later the best.
I'm sure I'm going to go abroad to work, and it is possible I would like to live too. I want to go out from this town as soon as possible.
Thanks for the corrections, I didn't realize.
Eliminari strive very by found a work because i don´t want lose my family
ResponderEliminardue i will stimate they .also i will stimate my friend and eat
spanish food
raul ferrer perez
The text this a structured well and it is simple to be going to another country to work has his good things but also bad as for example not being with your people
ResponderEliminarI totally agree with Lorena many people travel abroad to improve their skills in the study, such as speaking new languages, but there are also people who do not travel for those reasons but to work because in your country is not working.
ResponderEliminarBy ADRIAN PLAZA!! ;D
I think that you have not expressed well. intruduccion you improve and make the wording longer
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EliminarI have liked this composition. Lorena. your composition don't have mistake and are well structured. On the other hand, your composition present a topic very interesting for everybody.
ResponderEliminarALEJANDRO SANCHEZ GRACIA
I really think that Lore is right, both the advantages and the disadvantages, this composition can't make an error of cohesion or coherence because it is very well written,
ResponderEliminarOn the other hand the structure is also appropriate for his typology.
Rafa Bernabe . ¡¡
I agree with you in this topic and I think that your composition is very good structurated and of a good way worked.
ResponderEliminarYour topic is interesting and is a current topic that many people are living in our Country. As you say before traveling through new experiences and learn new skills such as language, now if you want to be rated academically have to go to another country. I hope things change.
ResponderEliminarCarolina Sanchez Bullejos
very good the structure , but in the 3 paragrhap you can say , haven't (have +not)
ResponderEliminarMarco Saz Garcia
I like your compositon, Lorena ! I haven't found any mistake. You have used a easy vocabulary and so I can understand it very good. You have done a good structure although you could have put a question in the introduction.
ResponderEliminarVirginia Belmonte.
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ResponderEliminarLorena has the whole reason. I have liked very much his composition. I believe the same thing that she. The family is the most important thing and aveces need to do sacrifices for her.
ResponderEliminarThe composition of Lorrane is very well argued, first to exposed the topic, to travel abroad in order TO find a work immediatelyto find to saying the advantages and disadvantages that seem to her to be followed by a conclusion. I think like lorena in the advantages and despentajas because all the persons who go away abroad for any motive say always the same thing, taken less to his families and when too much good does not understand the language they and are a bit lost. But always it is necessary to look the good side that you come with better domain of the language and it in a future always comes very well.
ResponderEliminarThis time I'm not going to check.the mistakes, cause my mates have just done it, so im going to discuss the topic. I agree with you lorena because if you travel abroad, im sure you'll improve your language skills. It also makes your more mature and it's a good expierence you never forget
ResponderEliminarApart from the mistakes you've already pointed out, I've found the following ones:
ResponderEliminar-help us (no TO) improve
-people who have travelled for working REASONS/ people who have travelled IN ORDER TO WORK
-when they have not had (no TO) their families
-BESIDES, they HAVE missed the country and our food too
-to find a JOB because they wantED TO try
-because THESE people
-they have NO other choice.