I'll tell you a story where we teach is worth more time i work well done to make the Maganto
cominenza history with 3 pigs that they were brothers
He built the first house Sardinia with straw, pork short time late
He built a second wooden pig, the pig cer took more but
fast and finally finished the last brother took all day to build
brick home, the next day the wolf came and said to the first pig that
open the door or blow and of course opened the door the wolf blow
and demolishing the house and ran up the wooden house where there happened
Like a story so went to the brick house and there the wolf blow but he could not tear it down and the pigs were safe
as a conclusion I think i `worth the effort
I dont feel my self prepared to criticice that composition, it's art.
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ResponderEliminarThe text of raul in spite of being short this one structured well and easy to read raul you are a crack
ResponderEliminarFirstly ,I would like to say that many people have been telling me that I would laugh with this, and , yes I had some fun ;P
ResponderEliminarWell, Raúl, I can help you correcting some mistakes like :
-i : and
-to make the Maganto : than being so lazy ( you're fantastic when you try to translate Bigastro's vocabulary into English XD)
-cominenza history with..:The Story begins ..
-Apart from that, you must know that you can't call 'he' to an animal and you should have written : 'One pig' or 'It'.
-Fast : quickly
-said to the first pig that open the door or blow : said to the first pig :''Open the door or I'll blow!''
-pigs were safe : pigs were safed
- I think i `worth the effort :' I think that it worths to make an effort'
And I've noticed other mistakes but I don't have enough time to correct them because I have to read other 2 compositions. BYE
I think equal that my friend Javi
ResponderEliminarBy: Adrian Plaza Martinez ;D!
It is a rare composicion. The topic is very different of the others.
ResponderEliminarwell raul i see words in spanish and of course i don´t undestand your composition because what is maganto? and comienzo you can say start or in first 0k. Well Raul you have a good taste choosing the story at three pigs you are a crack JEJE my congratulations is a story that nothing forget
ResponderEliminarI wrote a comment where I said that you made my day with this composition because it's very funny but I felt bad because I didn't write more and this composition has serious mistakes. Besides the mistakes that Maria has said, I think that the most important thing is DON'T USE THE TRANSLATOR because is very bad. We are here for learning and it's better make mistakes yourself that you make mistakes because of the translator. You can use the dictionary, if you prefer searching online, Trini gave us dictionaries online too: www.pons.eu, www.diccionario.reverso.net, www.wordreference.com.In the student's book, page 131 you can found conectors and vocabulary for the narration,use! Try do a longer introduction and conclusion too. If you read this, I hope you find my comment useful.
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EliminarRaul, your composition is very short and is very badly structured. On the other hand text has nothing to do with the topic
ResponderEliminarALEJANDRO SANCHEZ GRACIA
You have to do this. When the cap fits wear it... jajaja
ResponderEliminarI'm going to give you an advice: never use the translator,Raúl,this is very important.Sorry but I don't understand very well the story, I hope you look your mistakes as Maria has corrected.
ResponderEliminarFinally, I give you a curious fact: the word 'maganto' means: sad,thoughtful...
The meaning of lazy is only here because we always says with this sense. (Some of us have checked this morning)
Well, at least, you have tried it. Our schoolmates give you a very well advices, you should learn and to try to do the composition. That's how you could practise to PAU.
ResponderEliminarAlejandra Ávila
Firstly, I want give you an advice: You don't use translator !
ResponderEliminarYou have done many mistake and in addition, you have written words in spanish and they are wrong. You should have put full stops and commas and your composition is very short.
Virginia Belmonte.
raul your composition has an irregular structure, some words aren´t understood, but your introduction is very good.
ResponderEliminarJESUS VERA
I only can say that I completely agree with Mario.
ResponderEliminarhorrible Raul you musto to practice more and more , encourage.
ResponderEliminarMarco Saz Garcia