For many people the Holy Week processions, are only a waste of time and money, this is because of their atheism.
But, they are right? I think that could be true, but people who believe in God, do not agree.
Holy Week is an annual Christian commemoration of the passion, death and resurrection of Jesus of Nazareth.
It begins on Palm Sunday and ends on Easter Sunday. To my mind is ridiculous, because they can't scientifically prove the existence of God.
Despite of this, for people who believe in God, this is completely out of place, and only need blind faith to believe in God, this time of year is in order to celebrations and holidays. Me too take me my holidays and celebrations, but it will not change my faith.
In conclusion, although the majority of people like to enjoy this time of year, with family and friends, I think that everyone believes in these that he wants because he is free to do so.
rafa, you as always letting everything together, you have used few words and not well structured, always use the same adjectives and that makes the texno not pleasant to read
ResponderEliminarRafa share my opinion with respect to that god does not exist
ResponderEliminarand even that does not make me feel good that people who believe you can express your feeling through the streets with processions, text me seems it has good arguments and is well structured
Rubengo
The text of rafa this one very well I also believe that the one who is a believer he likes, think q it is a way of remember all the jesus's suffering of nazaret.
ResponderEliminarHey, well I found some mistakes like:
ResponderEliminar- they are right?: are they right?
- To my mind is ridiculous : to my mind it is ridiculous
- Me too take me my holidays : I also take my holidays..
I would like to give my opinion about your composition but I don't understand very well your conclusion when you say : ''I think that everyone believes in these that he wants because he is free to do so'' ..¿?
Rafa´s composition is good. He has writen an introduction where explains two positions different:
ResponderEliminarFirstly, people who do not approve this party
Secondly, people who appove this party and they go to party
this diferent postures are supported by different argument: agree or disagree
In conclusion this topic has been well worked.
By: Adrian Plaza ;D!
I am in favour of Rafa. But I believe that atheistic people recover the Faith when is interested in "she". The processions of Holy Week are nice (For example, that of the Silence), but it is very repetitive and already weary.
ResponderEliminarRafa you are a good philosofer but i think that the people that think don´t celebrate these parties how the people that don´t think in this.
ResponderEliminarWhen I say "I think that everyone believes in these that he wants because he is free to do so" I want to say :" Yo pienso que cada uno cree en aquello que quiere, porque es libre para hacerlo."
ResponderEliminarRafa Bernabe ¡¡
Rafa, your composition is not well structured. moreover, you have to use more connectors and not always use the same connectors
ResponderEliminarALEJANDRO SANCHEZ GRACIA
Is a discussion essay? If this composition is a discussionn essay, you would write your opinion in the conclusion because you write your opinion with the advantages and disadvantages too, but maybe it's correct in this way...I say this because I follow the structure of the book. Your composition is very short but I like your conclusion and I agree with you, everyone is free to believe what they want.
ResponderEliminarThis composition is good, but reaaly short of course!
ResponderEliminarDespite this,Rafa is right, I mean, I agree with your opinion, all is correct if we respect to each one, as he says, we are free to choose that we want.
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ResponderEliminarYour writing is very subjective. I think like you because if God exists would be proven scientifically so as a matter of faith that I do not see or feel certain that I do not believe exists. And personally I think Easter is a business of the churches, like everything they do.
ResponderEliminarCarolina Sanchez Bullejos.
I think that your composition is very short and I don't understand the structure. I have found some mistakes for example: They are right ? - Are they right ?...In addition, I don't understand the conclusion.
ResponderEliminarI agree with you, we are free to believe if God exists or not exists. But I also think that there are people who are believer and they think that processions are a commercial act.
Virginia Belmonte.
rafa your composition is fine but lacks more vocabulary. Also in this type of text you can not put i think ... and things in your opinion out of the conclusion.
ResponderEliminarJESUS VERA
your composition is not bad, you should use less coloquial worlds , you have to be clear and to use more vocabulary. However it has been difficult to understand the last part of our composition.
ResponderEliminarI agree with our opinion because I usually spend my holidays hanging out with my family and my boyfriend.
I think that at this time should not take all vacation because if I am faithful to the god flying spaghetti tmare me the other day raul
ResponderEliminarFistly, I think that the composition isn't good structurated because you have to follow this structure:
ResponderEliminar-In the first paragraph( introduction), you have to put the introduction of the topic and that there are agree and disagree ideas of it.
-In the second paragraph, you have to put the agree ideas or advantages of the topic.
-In the third paragraph, you have to put the disagree ideas or disadvantages of the topic.
-In the last paragraph, you have to put the summary of the agree and disagree ideas. Also, you have to put your opinion.
Well, in conclusion the mistakes more big of your composition are derivative of the bad structure.
In my opinion , the structure is so bad
ResponderEliminarMarco Saz Garcia