Are young people too obsessed with the consoles?
All young people today are very obsessed with consoles and spend the day playing in their houses and do not make homework neither study as a result down performance.
Ideas in favor consoles is that they can be a great hobby for everyone and that mothers can make their children study by threatening to take his console.
Ideas against the consoles are that young people lose much time and do not their homework and not studying. Another idea against could be that playing long hours hurt your eyes.
In conclusion, the consoles would only have to have them young people who get high marks in high school to do more.
I think that you should to put the opinion in the first paragraph and in the following paragraphs write arguments for supporte her. By: Paqui.
ResponderEliminarEm.. It is a very short composition , isn't it?
ResponderEliminarIn addition , I don't understand what you want to mean with .. 'down perfomance'.
To my mind, I disagree with you because playing consoles game isn't good to anybody either to clever people.. if you want you mean that.
Ideas in favor? I belive that is 'ideas for'...or am I wrong? The composition is short and you could use other connectors as: 'One advantage is that...','On the one hand','On the other hand' instead of 'ideas for and against.
ResponderEliminar"Ideas in favour of consoles" is correct too, but not "in favor consoles"
ResponderEliminarFirstly I have to say that this composition is very short, it has only 7 lines,so you have must expanded it because the parts of a composition should be distinguished.
ResponderEliminarI agree with you with that you have said about young people spend too much time playing with the consoles.
In my opinion you could make the most of this topic.
The topic of compostion is interesting and for this reason, you should have made the most of topic and you should have done longer the composition.
ResponderEliminarVirginia Belmonte.
I think the consoles is a funny distraction but we shouldn't abuse about this tecnologic
ResponderEliminarGood composition Alex
Marco Saz