lunes, 19 de diciembre de 2011

THE ENDLESS NIGHT /// Paula's composition

All happened in halloween.My friends and me were in Carol's house because  this night we went to sleep there.
we decorated all very good with cobweb, terrifying pumpkins and skulls.


Andre,Maria,Claudia Mazon and me thought in to play a joke Camelia,Claudia Alcaina,Carol and Marta, but suddenly the lights went out and we only listened strangers sounds and knock. We had got fear and we  shouted. Maria found a lantern and ours boyfriends  appeared. It was a joke!



We were angry, although they only did a thing that Andrea,Maria,Claudia M. and me wanted to do

11 comentarios:

  1. It's funny but the narration is very short.
    By the way, I sent my narration yesterday.Where is it?

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  2. It's a good narration and it is good estructurate but it is very short, you should write it longer.

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  3. I think that your narration is very short. You should write the text more larg. The history is good.

    By: Paqui

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  4. I agree with the comment of Frnciscaa( Paqui) is very short

    ADRIAN PLAZA ;D

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  5. María Martínez Nortes2 de enero de 2012 a las 16:35

    The story is very funny and very well structured but as my classmates say , you should have written it more extensive and take advantage of it.
    HAPPY NEW YEAR TO EVERYBODY !

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  6. The story is very well structured but is very short. I think that you should write something more about your narration.

    ALEJANDRO SANCHEZ GRACIA

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  7. Your composition is amusing and funny but I think that your composition should be longer. In addition, I believe that you should have used more vocabulary.

    Virginia Belmonte.

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  8. MERCHE ALCAINA HIDALGO7 de enero de 2012 a las 11:47

    This composition is very short,it must be longer.The story is interesting but when you have read every paragraph is as if it was incomplete above all the last paragraph.

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  9. I agree with Merche this composition is very short..
    Marco

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  10. paula the wording is well but but I see that lacks a bit more of conclusion ... but I have liked the topic

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  11. Good history paulaa!! This one well structured but it is short

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