Should Parents Give More Freedom To Their Sons And Daunghters?
Nearly all young people think that it is better if they have got more freedom for doing what they want. But there are advantages and disadvantages about this.
In the view of the sons and daunghters is better to be independent and have more freedom because they can arrive at home later, they can go to all parties, sleeping tight, not to have arguments with anybody... Think that not to have rules is something positive and they would feel better if it don't exist. If the parents give much freedom, they don't have arguments everytime with their sons and daunghters.
However, if you are independent, you have to do all homework, study and work at same time. This isn't easy.
In addition, nowadays, the parents aren't strict with their sons and daunghters and they have already lost the respect for the old people and for their parents. Today the youngs have got too much freedom and they do what they want. For this cause they aren't a very good persons, they don't want study or they only think about parties, in general.
In my opinion the parents have to be more stricts because the sons and daunghters will be better.
I'm agree with Alejandra, I think that is good that the parents are stricts with us because if the parents give us too much freedom, the majority doesn't behave in a responsible way. The parents are indispensable, at least up to a certain age. Now that we have we do not value it so much, but when they aren't we done of less.
ResponderEliminarThe composition of Alejandra is very good. The composition is structured very well.
The text is very good estructured.I'm agree with you.I think that the parents only want that him son are good educated and that we in the future will understand this, although now we don't like.
ResponderEliminarPAULA GUIRAO GRAU
I think parents should be strict provided
ResponderEliminarhave reason to be, if your child misbehaves it should be
strict, however if the children are well behaved and are
responsible parents should not be strict.
Rubengo =)
I agree with your opinion !
ResponderEliminarI also think that parents should be stricter.
In my opinion, your compositon is perfect. Your composition have a paragraph with advantages and other paragraph with disadvantages. In addition, you only have put your opinion in the end.
Virginia Belmonte.
In general your composition has a good structure and I also agree with your ideas for example with that you say that today,young people have too much freedom, you are right.
ResponderEliminarThere are only two things in your composition that I would change: the introduction because I think it is very general and it doesn't say nothing and in the conclusion, I would do it longer. But in general,you have done a good composition.
Some corrections for Alejandra:
ResponderEliminar-"THEY think that"
-"They would feel better if THEY DIDN'T exist"
-"They aren't ----- very good persons, they don't want TO study"
Paqui:
-"I agree", no verb to be, "I'm agree" is incorrect.
-Be careful when you look up a word in the dictionary. Check again "echar de menos"
Good job everybody!!
I agree with Alejandra, the parents are strict because they want the best for us.
ResponderEliminarThe composition has good structure.
JESUS VERA
I think young people have much freedom, so they don't listen to they parents or other person. they think they are all power, and this isn't true, parent should be more strict with them.
ResponderEliminarsometimes bad people are created by them freedom, for do all they want always.
TAMARA ALÓS
the text has a good structure, and the paragraphs are well positioned and presented in general, agree well with the relationship of the text
ResponderEliminarI believe that your composition is very well organized with conectors. I'm agree with Alejandra because I think that parents should be stricter and also are indispensable.
ResponderEliminarI like this composicion
ALEJANDRO SÁNCHEZ
I agrre with Alejandra too , the parents are sticts but when we are much old , we are agrre with our parents
ResponderEliminarMarco Saz
I'm agree with Alejandra, I think that is good that the parents are stricts with us because if the parents give us too much freedom....
ResponderEliminarcomposition is very well organized with conectors.
EMilioo Torres
I see your point but I don't think this. I know that our parents do this thinking in our future,and that's good. However, I think the best would be that we were able to do what we want, because when there are rules, we always break them.
ResponderEliminarAnd now, according to the composition, it's good structurated but it could be better with another introduction
I agree with alejandra because I think that parents have to punish if we do something wrong, we shouldn't be so independient. We'll have a lot of time in the future to be independient.
ResponderEliminarAngel Valero
The text this a structured well and it exposes good arguments, I think the same thing.
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